First off I want to encourage you to keep on drawing. I say that because I don't want to come off as critisizing straight off. I don't know what your art looks like when you ahve pen and paper available, but these pictures are is a style I like to call "Fanime style." It's sort of got the idea but without the understanding.
Remember that you are drawing masses, not shapes, that lines define a 3d shape. The eye's are 3d, the face curves a certian way.
Like Himler says, a good idea is to study anotomy. Draw real people. Notice how the nose goes to the cheeks, goes to the lips to the chin. Make note of where the arm bulges and dips, where the skin is just a thin membrane over the bone at the knuckles and elbows. The body is not simple shapes jointed together helter-skelter. Good manga artists realize this.
The other thing I recomend is don't rush. If you take less than an hour to do your drawing you're taking too long. A good manga artist will take 40-50 minutes on the sketch before (s)he commits the lines to ink, and then another 30+ minutes on being sure the inking is carefully done. I know that's not the medum you're using, but the idea is the same. Take your time. Look critically at what you're doing and if it doesn't look right erase and do it again and again until it looks okay.
I know what of I speak. I haven't posted my art here, but trust me. You've got potential. Keep going and show us what you can do!
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