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Old 07-02-2005, 08:49 PM   #11
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For those who like things that rhyme...

Prayer
© A long, long time ago... est 1994

Crystal green exuberance,
Deadened by despair.
He wished, he hoped, he loved, he lost -
And now, he's solitaire.

In the window of his mind,
He saw the blackness of alone,
But in the blindness of his trance,
He noticed not the light she shone.

Flaming red in spirit,
Yet knows not what she feels.
Never remembering what she lost
Nor strengths that she could wield.

Purest innocence was ripped to shreds
She had no thoughts of love again.
For the longest time that she has known,
She's paid for another's sin.

Thrown together, in a mix
For trying to stop the pain.
Trying not to fall into the darkness,
The insane.

She travelled down a path she's known
But only once has been -
And in the mirror of his soul,
She found her heart again.

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Old 08-02-2005, 12:18 AM   #12
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again, you've provide a great piece of poetry...ehm, i'm sorry, i mean "rhyme" :whistle:

but what's the difference anyway, rhyme...poetry - in both cases it's impressive
verbal art!

i wish i could handle the english language like you do, then i'd give some poems
a try, too.

of course such texts can be done in german as well, but in my opinion, english has
a more attracting melody, somehow!

you are a very interesting person, telling that from the artworks you've provided
so far - both, visual and verbal.
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Old 08-02-2005, 12:27 AM   #13
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Originally posted by Strobe@Feb 8 2005, 01:18 AM
of course such texts can be done in german as well, but in my opinion, english has
a more attracting melody, somehow!

Being studying it for 5 years, I second that <_<

Those 2 pieces are simply beautiful.
I too wish I could handle English as taikara does..

Tai, where are you from? :blink:
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Old 08-02-2005, 12:37 AM   #14
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Hmm....

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Originally posted by Strobe
@taikara:
don't be so humble.... just give it a try! you might be very surprised with the
outcome. but without trying you will never know...
Maybe someone should take their own advice? :angel:

@TheVoid: It's a secret. :bleh:

I'm just teasing, but I'll let you guess before I tell you, though.

I'm curious to see what people think.

Thank you both for your kind words
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Old 08-02-2005, 12:40 AM   #15
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Originally posted by taikara@Feb 8 2005, 01:37 AM
Maybe someone should take their own advice? :angel:
* being confused *
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Old 08-02-2005, 12:51 AM   #16
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Here. Look at what you said to me after Puffin posted her photo.
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Old 08-02-2005, 01:14 AM   #17
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hm, ok, i think i caught your drift.... :angel:

if i may join the guessing about your origin, tai, i'd go for:
usa
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Old 08-02-2005, 01:18 AM   #18
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Geez, you're good.

It took Puffin two tries. I won't talk about TheVoid.

I live in Florida. Right next to Disney. Sigh.

I hate it here.
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Old 08-02-2005, 01:23 AM   #19
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Geez, you're good.

It took Puffin two tries. I won't talk about TheVoid.

I live in Florida. Right next to Disney. Sigh.

I hate it here.
Good God I suck in guessing LOL

But you shouldn't be so embarrassed :blink:

I'd like to pay a visit there, tho I hate Mickey Mouse.
But Goofy is cool.

Not to mention Carl Barks and his work
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Old 08-02-2005, 01:40 AM   #20
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Don't feel bad. It took you the longest to guess, but you guessed some of my favorite countries.

It would be nice to be from Ireland. Sigh.
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