29-09-2006, 07:05 PM | #31 | ||
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hah, nice one's you've got there, I really liked the solitary thingy one. really good stuff
here's anothe rpoem of mine... this one was actually turned into a song, though it didn't work out. oh well... Violent Lovers Seldom Survive His world Is a million pieces of broken dreams and hopes His rage never ceases, his love always drowns And he can't hide the fact that he still loves her When her knees are on the ground And her lips are smiling at him Her world has given up on her All that she wanted was the kiss she never had She screams tonight, her lips are sealed But her eyes are not She cries all night, but it's so different When she's left to rot His world Has crumbled once again to find himself Going up the stairs that once led him there It's not enough, he felt her shell Break apart, what does she have to bear Her kiss was the reason Her last kiss tasted like the world fell on him Her wish was the reason Her last wish was that time would never lack She was wrong when the clock was just past midnight He never sinned And she walked away like it was the very last time He'd see her face Her world is in tones of crimson and hazel Her room is intoxicated with the tears she bled When your world is upside down what do you do? Instead of killing yourself with the nearest cleaver you find And she could find a million reasons to help her get through She was so tired of bleeding Her life she threw away So now we have two broken souls A peaceful end for a violent love i've still got a long way to go. |
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29-09-2006, 07:48 PM | #32 | ||
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mg2: <-- That's all i've to say...what it lacks in rhyme, it makes up for with painfully concentrated emotion...
I forgot that I actually do have another one on here that I haven't posted: The Fight Song Cast down and ravaged You all feel the bite Of sword and of arrow, Wielded by light And who are they who possess such might? Nobeasts who’d stand against you in a fight They think we’re all vermin We’ve all heard the jeers! Our kin executed? We’ve all heard the cheers! And out of the darkness the vermin we call Our forefathers trapped within Dark Forest walls! To channel ourselves and our courage within To smite the kingdom of short sighted them! And with our new power we rise from the dust True pain and suffering are all but a must! They’ll cry out in anguish! They’ll cry out in pain! They’ll cry for their Savior again and again! But they’ll never have comfort, They won’t see the light, Let them live our lives of hatred and spite! And right by my side you will march and ignite Dwellings and churches with our firelight! Whatever you see is yours through and through, If fancied, take not just one, but two! Through all of the alleys let ring out our cry! Let them all know how they’re ‘bout to die! Crush them and skin them and cut off their heads! Soon all of those who oppose will be dead! We’ll kill all the families! We’ll darken the light! Their judgement has come… FIGHT! FIGHT!
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29-09-2006, 08:18 PM | #34 | ||
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So you don't like it then, I take it...
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29-09-2006, 08:43 PM | #35 | ||
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it's just that these kind of things reaaaly make me laugh cause they sound retarded. it's too untr00!
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Diabet
Imi zici atatea vorbe frumoase Ce put a flori de mar, Dar care se scufunda in tarana de pe cer... Eu, mai brav, te vorbesc pe la spate, Cuvinte-mbibate in cacat glucozic. Care din noi are dreptate? Cand sarea va cadea pe rana Adevarul va iesi la suprafata Precum rahatul in canalizare. i will translate it later..probably |
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13-12-2006, 08:31 AM | #37 | ||
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Hiya Iowa
I was just wondering about your last poem - At the begining it's "you" who has/is the metaphorical* light yes? But at the end of the poem "you're" taking the light away... It's a tad confusing. Did I miss something or did the device get muddled up along the way? *I'm assuming it is a metaphor By the way - I love the Gingerbread Ducks! (Also, there's a post by post poem being created by folks over in the Games and Competitions section of the forum - the more the merrier!)
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18-12-2006, 11:12 PM | #38 | ||
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"Of sword and of arrow, Wielded by light And who are they who possess such might? Nobeasts who’d stand against you in a fight" The word "they" is not pertaining to myself, if you examine it closer, you'll see that I am personified as the person rallying these people with the messages of hatred found in the text.
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