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[taikara]

Upon request....

Morning Glow
© 2002

Night-jacked thoughts
Pumped, racing
Depriving, detrimental
1000k a second
Never stopping
Never leading
To the sweet haze
Of oblivious dreams.

Well, who needs sleep?
Am I mortal
or Godlike?
The hallucinations
Explain clearly
That I am meant for
Death...
But the visions
Extoll powers
Of the eternal mind.

Sugar-coated poison
Promising numbness
Delivering haze.
After the sweet oblique
Blackness fades,
I am refreshed
I am reborn,
Glowing with life
Unforgotten.


Aren't you sorry you asked? :angel:

[Wael]

Nope /

-*The arrogantly presented lesson for the public begins*-

It´s a funny thing with words really,
They aren´t comparable as such,
Not in any way that paintings & drawings are /

And it´s ironic really ,
How certain poems are respected & valued (eg. - The Raven-),
Only because they touch the masses of the common people with their subjects,
(eg. The Raven - Death - )

"For it is the inner meaning in ones life,
"How the poem touches someone" "eg, Tells something that concerns ones life deeply or even subconsciously",
That creates the respect as such for a poem /-

And naturally,
This is why poems are less regarded,
when compared with pictures & paintings,
For it´s often only about looks in their case -

-*The arrogantly presented lesson for the public ends*-

It´s good that you posted it,
And I personally like it quite much (Though I visited the dictionary times five ) /-

If you get enough will to do so,
Then yes, please post more /-

[taikara]

LOL

I'm laughing so hard right now.

I love the public lecture, arrogantly presented or not. It was a nice way to say, "Just because people don't like it doesn't mean it's not good."

Therein lies the reason my poetry is so God-awful. I like pretty words, but that doesn't mean the poem makes sense on first glance.

Thank you for encouraging me, though I truly feel sorry for everyone else. :angel:

Why? It's a very good written half-poem. Half, because the sentences don't rhyme.

[Wael]

Originally posted by FreeFreddy@Feb 7 2005, 11:54 AM
Why? It's a very good written half-poem. Half, because the sentences don't rhyme.

Actually no,
Rhyming & poetry are different areas /-

Actually,
Poems that rhyme, rhyming,
Is only the most common way of writing poems,
But it isn´t a necessity /-

[Strobe]

rhyming or not, but the mood captured within these words really attracted me!

when i was younger, i used to listen to heavy metal - to be precise to a subcategory
called "doom metal". there were groups like "anathema", "my dying bride" or
"tiamat" which had similar texts for lyrics, and i liked them alot! actually, i still
like the music of these bands, and that's may be why i feel so familiar about your
poem! there's something mystical and profound to it. perhaps you will laugh on
me because of this statement, but anyways - these words are impressive!

[taikara]

I write lyrics, too.

Not "doom metal," but closer to A Perfect Circle. I've been told I sound like a female Maynard James Keenan. Only not nearly as good!

Really? Perhaps you would like to show us your voice somehow?
(evades angry Black Angel :whistle

[taikara]

Don't make Black angel angry, especially not at me! *scary*

Anyway, voices are invisible, so how could I show it in any case? :angel:

[Black angel]

Don't worry, he won't ecape me. :evil: :angel: You'll have nothing to worry, too.
I think you can record a short fragment of your voice, around 10-15 seconds, and attach it here as a WAV file.