The poem is very nice, it's sweet. I'm sure she'll like it!
One thing, though, that I would have made different.
This is how I would've made it:
Quote:
Your light footfalls
As you softly advance
The gay laughter calls
I wish for just one chance.
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but of course it's your poem
do what you think is best.
The story is interesting, but does it end there? If you have time and will, I'm sure you could write something about what happens after he was cought and before he's executed (unless he manages to escape
which I hope, becuase I kinda like Alexander LOL )
Well, you should definitly post some more here
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