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taikara
07-02-2005, 04:00 AM
Upon request....

Morning Glow
© 2002

Night-jacked thoughts
Pumped, racing
Depriving, detrimental
1000k a second
Never stopping
Never leading
To the sweet haze
Of oblivious dreams.

Well, who needs sleep?
Am I mortal
or Godlike?
The hallucinations
Explain clearly
That I am meant for
Death...
But the visions
Extoll powers
Of the eternal mind.

Sugar-coated poison
Promising numbness
Delivering haze.
After the sweet oblique
Blackness fades,
I am refreshed
I am reborn,
Glowing with life
Unforgotten.


Aren't you sorry you asked? :angel:

Wael
07-02-2005, 06:46 AM
Nope /

-*The arrogantly presented lesson for the public begins*-

It´s a funny thing with words really,
They aren´t comparable as such,
Not in any way that paintings & drawings are /

And it´s ironic really ,
How certain poems are respected & valued (eg. - The Raven-),
Only because they touch the masses of the common people with their subjects,
(eg. The Raven - Death - )

"For it is the inner meaning in ones life,
"How the poem touches someone" "eg, Tells something that concerns ones life deeply or even subconsciously",
That creates the respect as such for a poem /-

And naturally,
This is why poems are less regarded,
when compared with pictures & paintings,
For it´s often only about looks in their case -

-*The arrogantly presented lesson for the public ends*-

It´s good that you posted it,
And I personally like it quite much (Though I visited the dictionary times five :D) /-

If you get enough will to do so,
Then yes, please post more /-

taikara
07-02-2005, 07:09 AM
LOL

I'm laughing so hard right now.

I love the public lecture, arrogantly presented or not. It was a nice way to say, "Just because people don't like it doesn't mean it's not good." :D

Therein lies the reason my poetry is so God-awful. I like pretty words, but that doesn't mean the poem makes sense on first glance.

Thank you for encouraging me, though I truly feel sorry for everyone else. :tomato: :angel:

FreeFreddy
07-02-2005, 11:54 AM
Why? It's a very good written half-poem. Half, because the sentences don't rhyme. ;)

Wael
07-02-2005, 12:43 PM
Originally posted by FreeFreddy@Feb 7 2005, 11:54 AM
Why? It's a very good written half-poem. Half, because the sentences don't rhyme. ;)
Actually no,
Rhyming & poetry are different areas /-

Actually,
Poems that rhyme, rhyming,
Is only the most common way of writing poems,
But it isn´t a necessity /-

Strobe
07-02-2005, 03:02 PM
rhyming or not, but the mood captured within these words really attracted me!

when i was younger, i used to listen to heavy metal - to be precise to a subcategory
called "doom metal". there were groups like "anathema", "my dying bride" or
"tiamat" which had similar texts for lyrics, and i liked them alot! actually, i still
like the music of these bands, and that's may be why i feel so familiar about your
poem! there's something mystical and profound to it. perhaps you will laugh on
me because of this statement, but anyways - these words are impressive!

taikara
07-02-2005, 05:41 PM
I write lyrics, too.

Not "doom metal," but closer to A Perfect Circle. I've been told I sound like a female Maynard James Keenan. Only not nearly as good!

FreeFreddy
07-02-2005, 05:46 PM
Really? Perhaps you would like to show us your voice somehow? ;)
(evades angry Black Angel :whistle:)

taikara
07-02-2005, 05:53 PM
Don't make Black angel angry, especially not at me! *scary*

Anyway, voices are invisible, so how could I show it in any case? :angel:

Black angel
07-02-2005, 06:12 PM
Don't worry, he won't ecape me. :evil: :angel: You'll have nothing to worry, too. :D
I think you can record a short fragment of your voice, around 10-15 seconds, and attach it here as a WAV file.

taikara
07-02-2005, 08:49 PM
For those who like things that rhyme...

Prayer
© A long, long time ago... est 1994

Crystal green exuberance,
Deadened by despair.
He wished, he hoped, he loved, he lost -
And now, he's solitaire.

In the window of his mind,
He saw the blackness of alone,
But in the blindness of his trance,
He noticed not the light she shone.

Flaming red in spirit,
Yet knows not what she feels.
Never remembering what she lost
Nor strengths that she could wield.

Purest innocence was ripped to shreds
She had no thoughts of love again.
For the longest time that she has known,
She's paid for another's sin.

Thrown together, in a mix
For trying to stop the pain.
Trying not to fall into the darkness,
The insane.

She travelled down a path she's known
But only once has been -
And in the mirror of his soul,
She found her heart again.

Strobe
08-02-2005, 12:18 AM
again, you've provide a great piece of poetry...ehm, i'm sorry, i mean "rhyme" :whistle:

but what's the difference anyway, rhyme...poetry - in both cases it's impressive
verbal art!

i wish i could handle the english language like you do, then i'd give some poems
a try, too.

of course such texts can be done in german as well, but in my opinion, english has
a more attracting melody, somehow!

you are a very interesting person, telling that from the artworks you've provided
so far - both, visual and verbal.

TheVoid
08-02-2005, 12:27 AM
Originally posted by Strobe@Feb 8 2005, 01:18 AM
of course such texts can be done in german as well, but in my opinion, english has
a more attracting melody, somehow!


Being studying it for 5 years, I second that <_<

Those 2 pieces are simply beautiful.
I too wish I could handle English as taikara does..

Tai, where are you from? :blink:

taikara
08-02-2005, 12:37 AM
Hmm....

Originally posted by Strobe
@taikara:
don't be so humble.... just give it a try! you might be very surprised with the
outcome. but without trying you will never know...

Maybe someone should take their own advice? :angel:

@TheVoid: It's a secret. :bleh:

I'm just teasing, but I'll let you guess before I tell you, though. :D

I'm curious to see what people think.

Thank you both for your kind words :)

Strobe
08-02-2005, 12:40 AM
Originally posted by taikara@Feb 8 2005, 01:37 AM
Maybe someone should take their own advice? :angel:

* being confused * :huh:

taikara
08-02-2005, 12:51 AM
Here (http://www.abandonia.com/forum/index.php?showtopic=3126&st=15). Look at what you said to me after Puffin posted her photo. :D

Strobe
08-02-2005, 01:14 AM
hm, ok, i think i caught your drift.... :angel:

if i may join the guessing about your origin, tai, i'd go for:
usa

taikara
08-02-2005, 01:18 AM
Geez, you're good.

It took Puffin two tries. I won't talk about TheVoid. :sneaky:

I live in Florida. Right next to Disney. Sigh.

I hate it here. :cry:

TheVoid
08-02-2005, 01:23 AM
Originally posted by taikara@Feb 8 2005, 02:18 AM
Geez, you're good.

It took Puffin two tries. I won't talk about TheVoid. :sneaky:

I live in Florida. Right next to Disney. Sigh.

I hate it here. :cry:
Good God I suck in guessing LOL

But you shouldn't be so embarrassed :blink:

I'd like to pay a visit there, tho I hate Mickey Mouse.
But Goofy is cool.

Not to mention Carl Barks and his work :drool:

taikara
08-02-2005, 01:40 AM
Don't feel bad. It took you the longest to guess, but you guessed some of my favorite countries. :D

It would be nice to be from Ireland. Sigh.

Strobe
08-02-2005, 01:54 AM
so, you're from sunny florida? if you really are so unsatisfied by that place
where you're living in, we should exchange our home places... :sneaky:

but honestly, germany sucks after living there for 27 years, i can tell you!

i've never been to florida yet. only in new york and new jersey where my relatives
live, and it's really nice there. not as warm as in florida, though, but still acceptable...

taikara
08-02-2005, 04:26 AM
I've been to Austria, Italy, and Germany.

I like it there, so sure, let's trade :ok:

I went without electricity for nearly two months this summer. Hurricanes hit every five seconds. I'm sure you'll love it. :sneaky:

FreeFreddy
08-02-2005, 08:14 AM
Originally posted by Strobe@Feb 8 2005, 02:54 AM
but honestly, germany sucks after living there for 27 years, i can tell you!
I'm only 14 years there, but it sucks all the same. Raining most of the time, and icy cold in the winter... :rolleyes:

taikara
08-02-2005, 05:30 PM
Pouring
©1997

The heart-leadenness,
Which falls
So sweetly,
Drips from your heart -
Telling me to run,
To find a cup
To hold the hurt in.

My fingertips
Wished for
The comfort
Of your soothing
But it was strangely
Fleeting.

I find the path
That struck my foot
Telling me
Where to go
What to take
Who to love -
It tells me:
You are there.


Note: If you're using a dictionary, don't bother to look up "heart-leadenness." I made it up. :angel: It's meant to give the impression "heavy hearted," which means "extreme sadness."

Strobe
08-02-2005, 06:39 PM
again, a very expressive piece of poetry!!

allow me a question: why are your poems sounding so "sad"?

maybe my level of english lacks the appropriate ability of interpretation,
but somehow these works appear to have a sad message in them...

are you only writing poems when you feel a little down?

perhaps i'm only misinterpreting the core-meaning of the poems....

taikara
08-02-2005, 10:15 PM
There's absolutely nothing wrong with your English.

Normally, I write poetry when I'm sad or angry. And usually, I'm angry because I'm sad.

I don't like feeling sad or angry, and I typically don't like burdening other people with it, either. So, the only way to get it out is to write about it. Then, later, if people show an interest, I share it. That way, the core feelings are already gone, and it doesn't hurt anyone, or make anybody feel bad, because the problem has already taken care of itself.

I typically only write poetry after a breakup, or after a friend has let me down, so it's usually some pathetic drivel about how love sucks :tomato:

I put words together pretty well, but I have really boring subject matter. I should try to write about other things than just broken hearts.

I do, however, keep a blog :whistle:

It covers a wider range of things than just sadness. I'm working on putting a site together where I can post my blogs and my music. If I can get a music studio program that's not complete junk, that is. I've already registered the site, but there's nothing up right now.

I've been thinking about posting some lyrics here in the meantime.... :sneaky:

FreeFreddy
09-02-2005, 08:06 AM
Again a great poem. Tai, you're "floating above the clouds", like this could be called, right?

Wael
09-02-2005, 08:02 PM
Originally posted by taikara@Feb 8 2005, 10:15 PM
I put words together pretty well, but I have really boring subject matter. I should try to write about other things than just broken hearts.
Yes... something less cliché,
The happy happy love? :blink:

Seriously,
The best poems always come from feelings,
(The way, I believe, you´ve wrote them)
Pure love, hate, loneliness?

You should write only when you feel like writing & of what you feel like writing,
For trying to write about something that isn´t "bubbling" inside just then,
Has usually the tendency to be written as noticeable reluctant words,
(If that makes any sense)

/ I might be wrong though /

Anyways,
Your poems are amazingly well written,
And I still can´t but be in the awe of your verbal talents /-

Strobe
09-02-2005, 08:38 PM
Originally posted by taikara@Feb 8 2005, 11:15 PM
...but I have really boring subject matter.
i totally disagree!! your subjects of poetry are by no means "boring"!! how dare you
say that? ;) i was only a little bit confused because in general you don't seem to be
such a sad person at all, and thus you contradict the basic expressions of your poems
somehow.

but through your explanation of how and when you write them, i understand your
point very well.

BTW: i (and for sure not only i) would be very eager to get some deeper insights
into your blog and stuff, so please make sure to tell us when your site is available.

of course you can ask any time when you should need (technical) advise/help in
doing that...

Black angel
09-02-2005, 08:50 PM
Originally posted by FreeFreddy@Feb 9 2005, 08:06 AM
Again a great poem. Tai, you're "floating above the clouds", like this could be called, right?
He was the first asking that, but I wanted to ask the same. Your writings are very beautiful. Don't call it boring. ;)

taikara
10-02-2005, 06:45 AM
@Wael:

There's a happy happy love? :blink: ;)

You should not disregard your own talents. I'm still waiting for you to post :angel:

@Strobe:

Thank you for your comments, and I will probably share the address when it's ready.

And funny you should offer help, I was just asking someone today if they knew anyone who could help. I've added you to my messenger through the information in your profile, and thanks for the offer, you'll be sorry :angel:

@FreeFreddy & Black angel:

I'm so sorry, but I don't understand what that means :( :tomato:

Please explain, so I can answer?

Wael
10-02-2005, 06:48 PM
Originally posted by taikara@Feb 10 2005, 06:45 AM
@Wael:

There's a happy happy love?* :blink: ;)

You should not disregard your own talents. I'm still waiting for you to post* :angel:

No,
But that´s only since love´s a sad trick of the mind /-


You should not disregard your own talents. I'm still waiting for you to post* :angel:

Perhaps,
But disregard?

No,
I´m not disregarding my verbal talents,
I´m admitting the lack of meaning that would be within the words /-

Strobe
10-02-2005, 07:10 PM
Originally posted by taikara@Feb 10 2005, 07:45 AM
@Strobe:
And funny you should offer help, I was just asking someone today if they knew anyone who could help. I've added you to my messenger through the information in your profile, and thanks for the offer, you'll be sorry :angel:

no problem. i won't be available often on msn messager until next week, though!
but then i'd be happy if i can help out.... we'll see then if i'll be sorry :D

taikara
10-02-2005, 07:16 PM
Next week?!! :blink:

No fair. Sigh.

Black angel
10-02-2005, 09:27 PM
Until then we could enjoy some more great poems by you. :angel:

taikara
10-02-2005, 10:14 PM
Falling
©2004, Sullied

With Lucifer's abandon,
You throw everything away
As you fall into the darkness
To burn away the shame.

You're set free by the passion,
Yet you're shackled by the pain.
A dichotomous dillusion,
Still, you long to play the game...

[Chorus:]

And I, I can feel...
Dark fires burning
In me.

You, you made me see...
Seduction and the temptress
In me, in me...

[...to be continued]

This is part of a song I wrote for my best friend Dani. She's obnoxiously flirtatious, and is often called not nice things, even though she's a complete sweetheart. She's the only one of my recent friends I still have. I haven't put up all the lyrics, because sadly, I can't find my lyric notebook, but I'm putting this here for now because I've had requests.

I'm not posting this in the music section because it's an example of my lyrics. The wav file is just for those who are interested in knowing how the song goes.

Sorry for the bad quality, my music studio does not work very well for me, and I'm trying to remedy it as soon as possible.

Falling. (http://www.sometimessulliedsoul.com/music/falling.wav)

Strobe
11-02-2005, 12:39 AM
the quality is very nice, so where's the problem? ;)

and, anyway, who needs a qualitative recording when he or (in this case) she
has such a great voice.....very soothing and beautiful! * amazed * :kosta:

the lyrics are, as always very "profound" and dark... can't wait to read (hear)
the rest of it! :ok:

taikara
11-02-2005, 12:44 AM
Thanks, Strobe, you're always so encouraging, it's giving me such a big head :bleh:

Of course, maybe I need it after going through a year of everyone telling me how much I suck LOL

I'm getting really excited about creating things again, it's nice to feel that way.

Strobe
11-02-2005, 01:02 AM
Originally posted by taikara@Feb 11 2005, 01:44 AM
Of course, maybe I need it after going through a year of everyone telling me how much I suck LOL
how come?? as far as i (we) know you from your postings and contributions
these people seem to be very far off the track!

Black angel
11-02-2005, 02:10 PM
Well, who knows. You can't really judge people by reading their contributions in the forum, right? :max:

taikara
11-02-2005, 05:42 PM
Sigh. Back to square one. :wall:

Strobe
14-02-2005, 07:38 PM
you might be partly right, angel! but if you gather all contributed details there's
definitely a chance of appraising forum users. there are many aspects worth
considering, particularily when things like art are presented. if you have a look
at all these "traces" i'm pretty sure that one might gain a certain impression about
the character of the respective person!

of course, on the web people can show themselves in another way as they are
in real live. but in most cases i think, that there's a distinct expression in the way
they present themselves in general. it's not that easy to pretend to be someone
else as you really are, even on the web. you can either trust people in their
"appearance" and rely on you personal experience in judging them
or you would have to be VERY cautious and critical about everybody
you're talking to in forums and such, because virtually anybody could have put
up a "digital disguise". i prefer the first option.

taikara
14-02-2005, 08:52 PM
I, for one, am very naive. I tend to take people at face value no matter what, until it's too late. Even after it's too late, I have a difficult time believing that someone I know can be bad. I hate not believing in people. Without that, it doesn't seem like there could be anything worth being here for.

It's gotten me into very bad situations, and I've probably hurt myself more from it than gleaned anything good.

So I tend to limit who I actually talk to in depth nowadays.

Eventually, I will post something here again. For some reason, I haven't felt like contributing lately. :(

It comes and goes.

Wael
14-02-2005, 09:58 PM
True, not being able to trust,
Nor to communicate in any other than "business" related way,
May take it´s tull now & then -

But then again,
It is balancing on an edge either way,
For trusting without limits usually ends up only into tears & melancholy (Thank you for increasing my vocabulary @Tai ) -

So the choice usually has to be made,
Whether to avoid the very possibility of getting hurt, but at the same time to wallow in a constant loneliness,
Or to take the chances against the odds, risking much, and yet gaining the possibility of gaining so much more -

And then,
There´s the undefineable middleway, the one that neither wins nor loses dramatically -

- Truth is a three edged sword?

Anyways,
I´ve never been able to understand,
How a person can sing without music & yet to make that what is heard sound beautiful and balanced -
You fall into that mystery -

Write when you´ll wish again,
We´ll listen

taikara
15-02-2005, 11:46 AM
I'm having a hard time sleeping, and that always means...

Poetry-posting time!

This one is a little different. I can explain it if someone wants me to.

Invisible Taciturn
© 2001

Sleepless dreaming,
In a land of floating marquees,
An invisible taciturn appears:
His unheard words freeze
Strangely on a screen.

Black and white phrasing;
Hypnotized, I seek
Perfect self-definition:
That teasing oblique-
An artful dodger.

Heard, and ignored,
Elusive unseen,
And as the lighting fades,
Surface reflections glean:
Nothing of insight.

Misunderstood,
The connection weak;
Two hearts pounding faintly:
An interest-pique,
Far distanced.

"Hey, invisible taciturn,
Tell me your name,
And I will sing songs for you."
But in silent shame,
She slipped quietly away-
The connection long ago
Broken.

taikara
25-02-2005, 04:18 AM
She
© 2005

She dons grace
Like shadows in the dark:
Flickering, formless
In silky pools of moonlight.

Can it be grasped?
The essence of the soul -
The mind's-eye view
Of the solitary child?

She dons hope
Like pebbles in the stream:
Pushed blindly forward
By a thousand unshed tears.

Can it be granted?
The wish for another -
Walking oceans alone,
Mocked by time himself?

She dons wisdom
Like snow in the summer:
Unseen, distrusted -
Melted by relentless sun.

Can it be given?
The strength to dream -
Uncrushed reveries
Fueled by secret fires?

I wrote this just now. Don't ask.

It's weak, but it can be reworked.

FreeFreddy
25-02-2005, 06:16 AM
Sounds mystical. I like it. :bye:

taikara
25-02-2005, 03:02 PM
Heh. I was going to make a reference to Cassandra, but then I thought:

Allusion is dead. Forget it.

:(

FreeFreddy
28-02-2005, 11:06 AM
If you meant with it that it's not worth to rework the text above, I disagree. I for my part would like to see the modified, better version of it. ;)